Great, I really like it! I liked Freddie's hands especially, because the way you did the back lighting gave them a sense of shape and depht, very nice The only thing I would reccomend is that you use a rougher paper. This is common printer paper, isn't it? Rougher paper allows you to blend graphite better, so that the pencil strokes don't show up when you fill a big area. I hope that made sense Keep up the good work!
It wasn't a printer paper, that was a bad album paper. Yep you're right, my friends criticized this paper Watercolor paper will be perfect for this works, but I'm lazy and I do all my scetches in albums